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Offline spanks

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lone
« on: March 27, 2007, 03:46:33 PM »
lone:

there you sit, so straight and tall
a beauty that is striking
your slender length and flawless face
upturned unto the sun
i wander by and think to sit
with you upon this hill
surrounded by a sea of green
the sky a cloudless space
but on this hill you reign supreme
you need no company
for you're the soldier of serenity
the one lone guard of peace


be nice, it's the only "poetry" i've ever written .. but i do play with kids stories ..
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Re: lone
« Reply #1 on: March 31, 2007, 06:10:12 PM »


did you write that about a landmark or monument ?


it was pretty cool spanks !!


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Re: lone
« Reply #2 on: April 02, 2007, 08:30:05 PM »
actually, it's about a flower :) a lone flower on the hill :)

but thank you, i had no idea it could be interpreted in that sense :)

i'm not good at writing .. but who knows :)
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Re: lone
« Reply #3 on: April 05, 2007, 10:30:18 AM »

I thought it could have been a landmark or monument from the last 2 lines but since your explanation it makes perfect sense !



I think you've alot of hidden talent there spanks !~


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